"The Ecosystem" Book Development Thread
Jun 10, 2016 18:28:32 GMT
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Post by namoon on Jun 10, 2016 18:28:32 GMT
Hello everyone! I thought of a really cool book idea for "The Ecosystem" and I decided to show you guys chapter 1. Enjoy!
Chapter 1: A Strange World
BATIS:
Sol awoke, wind rushing past his large ears. Startled, he struggled to orient himself. When he spread his wings out, they got shoved back into place by the wind almost immediately.
Trying again, he shoved out his wings. His descent slowed considerably. The G-force shook his skull and made him dizzy for a second. He shook his head to clear it and looked around.
The landscape was unfamiliar. There was a forest directly beneath him, with highlands to his right and an ocean that spread as far as he could see too the right. He looked higher. Many other batis were falling with him, all looking as afraid as he was. Looking even higher, he saw the sun. It didn't look at all like the sun back home. Where he was from the sun was yellow. In this strange place the sun was blue.
The forest was getting close now. Sol flapped his wings and flew downward to a large tree. Roosting, he tried to remember things. He was with his sister, Luna, when some beam came down and- He didn't remember anything after that.
Looking around the clearing, he saw the other batis there too. flying and calling for their mates and relatives. Sadness struck Sol, and he thought of Luna. He was startled out of his thought process when he heard a familiar voice, "Sol!".
He looked up. Roosting next to him was Spark, his best friend. Sol hugged him, and then asked if he had seen Luna. "No, Sorry. Do you, um, know where we are?" He replied. he shook his head. Apparently nobody knew where they were.
Sol's stomach grumbled. He looked around for food, and apparently others were hungry too. A lone batis Sol didn't know flew up to the moss. It hovered near it, then tried a cautious nibble.
the moss suddenly folded around the batis with spikes and started sucking the life out of the batis. the batis screamed in agony and terror. Sol gasped in terror. He didn't know where he was or how he got there, but he knew one thing: this place was dangerous. Very, very dangerous.
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SHADE WOULF:
Nova woke up, expecting to see her den and pups. Instead she was greeted with a beam all around her, sending her down, far to the ground. She howled, trying to break free from the beam. She gave up after a few seconds. Tired, she looked around. Things looked different than home...
Aha! She noticed that this was not the same mountain range as back home. She couldn't find any familiar landmarks, and there was a forest to her left.
She saw other Shade Woulves falling near her. She scanned them and tried to howl for her pup, but she couldn't find them. She felt a thud and landed on the ground.
Okay guys, that's all I have so far. Please give some criticism so I can do better.
Chapter 1: A Strange World
BATIS:
Sol awoke, wind rushing past his large ears. Startled, he struggled to orient himself. When he spread his wings out, they got shoved back into place by the wind almost immediately.
Trying again, he shoved out his wings. His descent slowed considerably. The G-force shook his skull and made him dizzy for a second. He shook his head to clear it and looked around.
The landscape was unfamiliar. There was a forest directly beneath him, with highlands to his right and an ocean that spread as far as he could see too the right. He looked higher. Many other batis were falling with him, all looking as afraid as he was. Looking even higher, he saw the sun. It didn't look at all like the sun back home. Where he was from the sun was yellow. In this strange place the sun was blue.
The forest was getting close now. Sol flapped his wings and flew downward to a large tree. Roosting, he tried to remember things. He was with his sister, Luna, when some beam came down and- He didn't remember anything after that.
Looking around the clearing, he saw the other batis there too. flying and calling for their mates and relatives. Sadness struck Sol, and he thought of Luna. He was startled out of his thought process when he heard a familiar voice, "Sol!".
He looked up. Roosting next to him was Spark, his best friend. Sol hugged him, and then asked if he had seen Luna. "No, Sorry. Do you, um, know where we are?" He replied. he shook his head. Apparently nobody knew where they were.
Sol's stomach grumbled. He looked around for food, and apparently others were hungry too. A lone batis Sol didn't know flew up to the moss. It hovered near it, then tried a cautious nibble.
the moss suddenly folded around the batis with spikes and started sucking the life out of the batis. the batis screamed in agony and terror. Sol gasped in terror. He didn't know where he was or how he got there, but he knew one thing: this place was dangerous. Very, very dangerous.
---
SHADE WOULF:
Nova woke up, expecting to see her den and pups. Instead she was greeted with a beam all around her, sending her down, far to the ground. She howled, trying to break free from the beam. She gave up after a few seconds. Tired, she looked around. Things looked different than home...
Aha! She noticed that this was not the same mountain range as back home. She couldn't find any familiar landmarks, and there was a forest to her left.
She saw other Shade Woulves falling near her. She scanned them and tried to howl for her pup, but she couldn't find them. She felt a thud and landed on the ground.
Okay guys, that's all I have so far. Please give some criticism so I can do better.
! 
