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Post by Skyguy98 on Nov 19, 2016 21:14:33 GMT
Completely tangential question here, but the small blurbs that mention modern scholars, they're really cool. Will they ever be built upon? What I'm getting at is perhaps a small piece or blurb from the perspective of these modern scholars that are looking into these ancient developments and possibly sharing their own opinions on them. Though it'd probably only work once the game progresses closer to the perspective of the scholars rather than ancient times. What I'm planning is that the blurb at the top of each post will be more of a modern looking back on the past. But maybe I'll add something like that in the paragraphs themselves or maybe an in term between rounds
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Post by Immortal_Dragon on Nov 19, 2016 21:22:19 GMT
Completely tangential question here, but the small blurbs that mention modern scholars, they're really cool. Will they ever be built upon? What I'm getting at is perhaps a small piece or blurb from the perspective of these modern scholars that are looking into these ancient developments and possibly sharing their own opinions on them. Though it'd probably only work once the game progresses closer to the perspective of the scholars rather than ancient times. What I'm planning is that the blurb at the top of each post will be more of a modern looking back on the past. But maybe I'll add something like that in the paragraphs themselves or maybe an in term between rounds
That's more up to you really, it's your game after all.
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Post by Skyguy98 on Nov 19, 2016 21:25:08 GMT
[/p][/quote] Well I'm always open to suggestions on what you guys want to see and like and don't like. Can't get better if No one says anything
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Post by Immortal_Dragon on Nov 19, 2016 21:39:02 GMT
Well, I know I wouldn't be opposed at all to such a thing myself.
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Post by Aquos on Nov 23, 2016 18:38:53 GMT
This story is made as an answer to Skyguy98 prompt. Hope you like it !
Ekyt said by the campfire as the night approached. "Man what a beatiful night it is." ,Ormen sad. "Indeed." ,added Iokwe. Ekyt laughed, and added: "The only thing that could make it better would be a good story." At that moment Uror, the storyteller, came in to the light of the campfire. "Well, if the Gods are listening", laughed Ormen, " We were just talking about you, Uror ! Happy to see you here. Comin' from the king ? 'Bet the old bastard likes a good story or two." "Ha, indeed he does", answered Uror. "Anyways", grinned Ekyt, "do you have a story to tell Uror ?" The other's quickly added in, and soon everyone around the fire whas asking for a story. "Alright, alright", the old man answered, "do you guys know of the story of the Mezykir, the Mad Witch ?" Of course Eykit knew the story, it was one of the most well known one's after all, but if Uror told it, he would sure enough listen. "Please just get to the story already !" said Iokwe. "Alright, alright, I'll tell it." "A long, long time ago, before the rise of Ekturos, before the Muktoi betrayed us, before the Orzal even existed, there was a women called Kyior. She was a beatiful stunning women, she had long orange hair, beautifull green eyes, and her skin was dark red like the sun. She was very talented in potionbrewing, and it is said that Zekr, goddes of magic and illusions, even learned her a few spells. She was well-loved, and everyone wanted her to marry Ermet, the son of the local king. And so it happened. The two loved eachother and they ruled rightfully over their people, but it all went wrong when the couple met an Erzyks, a creature of black magic and dark tricks" "The damned thing challenged the couple to a fight. But not one of swords, like Ermet thought, but one of magic and illusions. And thusly Kyior began the magical fight with the Erzyks. Whilst they both managed to perform impressive tricks, in the end it was the Erzyks who won, through unfair tricks, and dark illusions. After her defeat, Kyior asked the cursed creature how he did that. It answered that it knew ticks beyond all that Kyior whas capable of, and that it was willing to teach her some of them, for a price. This price was her sanity. "Sadly, she agreed, and the Eyzik teached her, and her husband, his black knowledge. Every day they would go to the place where they met the creature, and every day the creature learned them one dark trick. But they quickly felt the price. With every day they talked to the Erzyks, every new trick they learned, the world began to make less sense. They became angry at everything. They became angry with eachother. They became mad" "But Kyior, relizing what was happening, decided that she wouldn't let this happen with her. She created a strange potion and, using the dark magic she learned, she managed to put her growing insanity in the potion. Or so she though at least. She gave the potion to her husband, under the disguise that it was a cure to the growing insanity. Ermet drank the cursed potion, and quickly got his wife's madnes. However, that's not all. His arms grew too, and his skin became grey, he became feral and mad. He was no longer a Grinus, he was a mere beast. Laughing at this, Eykior drove her former husband away, the swamps in." "However, this was not enough. As Eykiors insanity kept, and kept growing, even when she didn't meet the Erzyks. So, she created more of those potions. And she sought more innocent victims out to drank them. And as more of those monsterous man came into the swamps, the people started calling them the Mezyk, the Cursed. And Ekyior became known as Mezykir, the Curser, the Mad Witch. The people only feared her terrible potions more then her madness. She terrorized these lands. "Eventually, Zekr noticed this and decided to punish her former student. She cursed her to become long and ugly, and to become like the monstrous men she helped create. She was forced to flee far into the swamp, where she became the leader of the Mezyk. And so a beatifull and rightious queen, became a monster-like leader of Cursed Men." She, and her 'childeren', as she came to call them, still exist. They still live deep in the swamps we call home. Hunters still see her monstrous childeren, and if you listen closely at fatefull nights, you will hear her mad screams. However, she was still taunted by her ever growing madness, and it is said that now puts in to what we call Ashar berries." After the old man finished his story, applause errupted around the campfire. It was clear that everyone enjoyed the story. And Ekyt just prayed that he never had to meet those horrible men from the story, or even worse, their mad queen....
Ok, that was the my story. I'm sorry if I was wrong in the portrayal in the humanoid creature's, or in the portrayal of Grinus characters. I'm also very much a beginning writer, so forgive the quality, and I'd be happy with any critique ! (Aslo, I hope I'm not too late with this)
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Post by agenttine on Nov 23, 2016 18:57:47 GMT
Alright, so only the first one and the second sections are official. By the second section, I mean up to the point where the doctor dies. No one else gets infected. The rest of this is a mostly ongoing story, so check every so often! ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "Hey, I feel as if we're the only people in this world," said Kol, the Scribe of the Kore Republic. "We should send out scouts to see if anyone else exists here. Who agrees with me?" continued Kol. Everyone unanimously agreed, for he was the leader of the council and they all were curious themselves.
Years later, the scouts still were never sent. Kol, who was on his deathbed due to a plague unknown to the republic, called the council for one last meeting. "Why haven't we sent scouts yet?" he asked. The Huntsman replied with, "But sir, we're working on improving our bows to be longer." Kol, furious with how they prioritized bows before exploration, stabbed the Huntsman before being impaled with a fishing spear from the Fisherman. The Huntsman soon died after a few days, not because of his wound, but because of that same plague Kol was infected with.
"Now kids, this is a story from the ancient Kore peoples who lived along this very same river. The moral was to never let anger control your life, and see you all tomorrow!" said the history teacher. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "The Huntsman is -" cried out the doctor before he coughed for the first time in several years. He started coughing more harshly, and soon, after a few hours, he was bedridden. "Help me..." said the doctor weakly to his assistant before he coughed something up and subsequently died.
Soon, everyone was coughing harshly, but a few people seemed resistant to the plague. Since they were physically different from the rest of the Kore peoples, they were cast out of society. They journeyed for several days until they reached a desert, and in it, a river. They rested for a few days and journeyed up the river until they found an oasis with a village around it. The leader of the outcasts, who was called Lok, greeted the watchmen of the village with a hearty greeting in the Kore language. The watchmen, obviously as confused as they can possibly be, arrested them. They were questioned, for several months, until the villagers of the Kometenvolk tribe figured out the language of the Kore peoples.
"Who are you? Why are you here?" asked Tok, the temporary jailor, to Lok. "We were outcasts from our republic when there was a major plag-" replied Lok before he coughed blood up violently and died. Soon, most of the people of the Kometenvolk tribe were coughing violently and dying. The outcasts were outcast again into the wilderness. They traveled for many months until they reached their homeland, or at least the ruins of it. There were many decaying corpses in the streets, and there were no survivors to bee seen.
Many decades later, the refugees rebuilt their republic in the ruins, and from there emerged a whole new culture descended from the Kore peoples. They called themselves the Kumoi, after the Huntsman who died of the very same plague which destroyed several cultures. ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "What happened to the Kore people, daddy?" asked the curious child to his father. "They were terrible people. They cast us out when a plague occurred, due to the fact that we were resistant to it, and thus we were forced to find new lands. We walked for weeks until we found a desert village. They too cast us out due to that same plague. Now, we're back here, in our ancestral homeland, and we're not willing to repeat the mistakes of others." replied the father. "But father, did any Kore people survive the plague? My friend says his family are the few survivors of the Kore people. Is he bad?" asked the child again. "What is this outrageous question? Of course they are all dead! Of course he's terrible!" said the father.
On that same day, a family of several were found dead in the river, being eaten by crocigators. No one had any suspects, until a few days later when the son reported the father to the council. He was stoned to death on the charge of manslaughter, and the case was put to rest.
"Now, kids, this is a gruesome story of the Kumoi, but it has an important moral; Always tell the truth to the authorities if you know someone who committed a crime. Even if it's your best friend, or your father, like in this story, always tell the authorities and never lie. Have a great weekend!" said the history teacher. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Centuries later, the river of the Kumoi Republic was filled with many dead bodies, and this is the story of why.
One day, a kid who had several crocigators was walking home one day when his body suddenly bursted into many bumps, and soon, he died. Soon, everybody who had a crocigator had dark bumps on their body.. Their bodies almost seemed to be decaying, and they all died within a few weeks. No one knew what happened, and no one was able to stop it.
After a few months, the plague stopped and the survivors were, once again, left to rebuild their civilization. However, there's a twist. The descendants of the wiped-out Kometenvolk Tribe were invading the survivors for destroying their civilization centuries ago. The Kumoi, with no defenses, were utterly wiped out, and all descendants of the Kore are now either enslaved or dead.
"Now, kids, do you now see just how much diseases such as pneumonia and the bubonic plague has affected this area? Hopefully you all do, since this is the last week before our first test! Study hard, and see you all on Tuesday!" said the history teacher. --------------------------------------------------------------------------- "Hello, and this is the test for 'How Diseases Shaped History'! Please take out a pencil and put away your tex-" says the history teacher right before she coughs. "Sorry, I just have a minor cough." continues on the teacher. "Wait, teacher, are you sure that it's not... Pneumonia?" asks a very disturbed student. "No, I'm sure it's mi-" says the teacher before she falls to the ground, dead! "Watch out! There are Kore terrorists at the school!" screams the security guard before the entire school catches fire...
(I'll continue this tomorrow so...)
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Post by Aquos on Nov 23, 2016 19:00:59 GMT
I might as well try making a few/one short story of things happening in my republic. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "Hey, I feel as if we're the only people in this world," said Kol, the Scribe of the Kore Republic. "We should send out scouts to see if anyone else exists here. Who agrees with me?" continued Kol. Everyone unanimously agreed, for he was the leader of the council and they all were curious themselves. Years later, the scouts still were never sent. Kol, who was on his deathbed due to a plague unknown to the republic, called the council for one last meeting. "Why haven't we sent scouts yet?" he asked. The Huntsman replied with, "But sir, we're working on improving our bows to be longer." Kol, furious with how they prioritized bows before exploration, stabbed the Huntsman before being impaled with a fishing spear from the Fisherman. The Huntsman soon died after a few days, not because of his wound, but because of that same plague Kol was infected with. "Now kids, this is a moral story from the ancient Kore peoples who lived along this very same river. The moral was to never let anger control your life, and see you all tomorrow!" said the history teacher. I don't know why, but I think this story is pretty funny. I like it !
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Post by Skyguy98 on Nov 23, 2016 19:12:49 GMT
Ok, that was the my story. I'm sorry if I was wrong in the portrayal in the humanoid creature's, or in the portrayal of Grinus characters. I'm also very much a beginning writer, so forgive the quality, and I'd be happy with any critique ! (Aslo, I hope I'm not too late with this) Its never too late for story time! It was a good and interesting story, I'm glad to see you incorporating the world into your story, such as it being an origin story for the Ashar berries that reflects your tribes fear of them. Also the creatures being deformed Orzals was a good touch, and probably the thoughts of a good portion of the tribe. It was great for a beginning story, and the portrayals were well done I think. . "Now kids, this is a moral story from the ancient Kore peoples who lived along this very same river. The moral was to never let anger control your life, and see you all tomorrow!" said the history teacher. Haha a good a session as any I think, perhaps the teachings in the Republic will reflect that I think. And a nice tribute to the fact that votes can only do so much with each one, maybe I'll do something about that so more happens in conjunction with your votes. Hmm Thank you both for participating, this helps me form the stories, ideas, and beliefs of the game and gives me something to reference in my descriptions. Puls it makes the world feel more alive and gives me things to consider adding
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Post by Aquos on Nov 23, 2016 19:16:41 GMT
Ok, that was the my story. I'm sorry if I was wrong in the portrayal in the humanoid creature's, or in the portrayal of Grinus characters. I'm also very much a beginning writer, so forgive the quality, and I'd be happy with any critique ! (Aslo, I hope I'm not too late with this) Its never too late for story time! It was a good and interesting story, I'm glad to see you incorporating the world into your story, such as it being an origin story for the Ashar berries that reflects your tribes fear of them. Also the creatures being deformed Orzals was a good touch, and probably the thoughts of a good portion of the tribe. It was great for a beginning story, and the portrayals were well done I think. . "Now kids, this is a moral story from the ancient Kore peoples who lived along this very same river. The moral was to never let anger control your life, and see you all tomorrow!" said the history teacher. Haha a good a session as any I think, perhaps the teachings in the Republic will reflect that I think. And a nice tribute to the fact that votes can only do so much with each one, maybe I'll do something about that so more happens in conjunction with your votes. Hmm Thank you both for participating, this helps me form the stories, ideas, and beliefs of the game and gives me something to reference in my descriptions. Puls it makes the world feel more alive and gives me things to consider adding Thanks for the feedback ! One minor thing, the creature's weren't Orzal, rather they where part of a kingdom that was their before the Orzal arrived. I know that doesn't make sense, but the Orzal can't know that
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Post by agenttine on Nov 23, 2016 19:23:52 GMT
I made another story in the original post, based on the plague I mentioned earlier. Now, don't panic. It's just uh... Imagination if a plague would ever happen. I also made ANOTHER story, set a few years after the Kumoi culture develops in the ruins of the Kore Republic, in the same post.
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Post by Skyguy98 on Nov 23, 2016 19:49:29 GMT
[]Thanks for the feedback ! One minor thing, the creature's weren't Orzal, rather they where part of a kingdom that was their before the Orzal arrived. I know that doesn't make sense, but the Orzal can't know that ahh that makes, and even adds to the story,hmm who's to say they are the first?
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Post by Immortal_Dragon on Nov 23, 2016 19:51:41 GMT
I've got one in the works still, so be on the lookout for that, but please don't hold your breath.
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Post by Skyguy98 on Nov 23, 2016 19:52:36 GMT
I made another story in the original post, based on the plague I mentioned earlier. Now, don't panic. It's just uh... Imagination if a plague would ever happen. I also made ANOTHER story, set a few years after the Kumoi culture develops in the ruins of the Kore Republic, in the same post. Hmm, maybe I should tell serial killer your plans? 😝 but seriously good work, and interesting scenarios. and who knows one bad roll and they could be reality. Haha I'm sensing a autocracy later in your future maybe? But also nice stories and history lessons, moral important to a society reveal much about Its mindset and sense of self, so nicely done
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Post by Skyguy98 on Nov 23, 2016 19:53:38 GMT
I've got one in the works still, so be on the lookout for that, but please don't hold your breath. looking forward to it!
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Post by agenttine on Nov 23, 2016 20:11:54 GMT
So uh, I made another plague story where they finally were wiped out forever.
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Post by Skyguy98 on Nov 23, 2016 20:36:49 GMT
So uh, I made another plague story where they finally were wiped out forever. I have a feeling the teacher never gets to that test. Nicely done
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Post by serialkiller🌴 on Nov 23, 2016 21:19:51 GMT
Do you guys really think a stupid disease or a bad roll could simply wipe out my lucky and blessed tribe ?? My people are invincible and obviously immune to bad rolls .... Nice work aquos and agenttine !
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Post by agenttine on Nov 23, 2016 21:25:28 GMT
Well, there could be a split off, and maybe a disease like typhoid/cholera. Maybe even new animals can do it.
Realized it was mostly sarcasm
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Post by Skyguy98 on Nov 23, 2016 21:51:11 GMT
Do you guys really think a stupid disease or a bad roll could simply wipe out my lucky and blessed tribe ?? My people are invincible and obviously immune to bad rolls .... Nice work aquos and agenttine ! You might want to check that smoke then
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Post by serialkiller🌴 on Nov 23, 2016 22:05:41 GMT
Do you guys really think a stupid disease or a bad roll could simply wipe out my lucky and blessed tribe ?? My people are invincible and obviously immune to bad rolls .... Nice work aquos and agenttine ! You might want to check that smoke then Am I the only one thinking that this is obliviously a trap ?
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